Descent (100)

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Image Prompt from Madison Woods to the Friday Fictioneers for the 100-Word Flash

Janice and I went ahead to see the slope.

“We’re not going that way,” she said.

I looked back at our disheveled group, barely clinging to the horses. They hadn’t heard, but already despair crinkled mouths and eyes.

“We have to go on.”

They would have turned back at her word; we would retrace our steps. But I went to the edge and looked down the precarious trail. It was, at least, a trail.

“Janice.”

Her jaw quivered, lips tightening. And she walked away, reigns in hand. It was so small, but this was my defiance. We would go on.

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    • You should join us! I know everyone would be happy to have you (and obviously you’re a fellow fab writer). It’s definitely a fun and friendly community.

      There should be some more links appearing in the comment feed here today (for other stories), and you can also check out Madison’s blog with the link about, and that would get you to all the various 100-word stories.

      Thanks for reading!!

    • philosphermouseofthehedge you should definitely join us with a handle like that. We do have a lot of fun, it’s only 100 words, and we’d love to have you 🙂

  1. Lime,

    Your story took flight right from the start with the two of them walking up to inspect the way down. I very much wanted to know what hardships lay behind them, what forces drove them on that trail, and what events fueled the defiance.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Thanks, Doug! I’m glad you’re feeling curious. I was trying to get more of a sense of plot line this time, and less of a complete story (partially because I think I usually go for the complete story — nice to change things up a bit).

      By the way, did you see the pictures from Venice and Milan? I thought you might like the change of genre — maybe I can convince Mads to use one of those photos for a weekly prompt!!

  2. I, too, liked the defiance in this piece. If you were to expand it into a broader story, I’d love to see more of that, what made her break free, why Janice was the leader and why she did not want to go down that way. Something down there beyond the immediate danger we see at this point? Curiouser and curiouser. Good job!

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